My paper needs to be revised because it’s not well done and also the paper introduction included that needs to be 4 references and there is only two. I emailed this paper to my professor to review before I could submit and she said, “In general, you’ve got good arguments here. I understand what you are trying to say but where I get a little tripped up is in you use of the phrasing as English is seemingly not your first language. I have attached your paper with some suggestions on the first few pages to try to get you started. It would also help if you more explicitly stated your hypothesis in the beginning.”

I also attached the paper that my professor send me so it could help you. I will appreciate if you could help me again with this paper. Oh you can also changed the title if you want to.

Thank you for all of your help.